Songs i wrote :D

skater guy · 12-07-2005, 20:13

Well yeah what the title says really.

I wrote three songs and atm in the process of writing a 4th ^_^

all i basically want is your opinions on them at whether you think they sound good and where something would sound better etc

ty in advance ^_^

Bleed is the incomplete one but please comment on it and tell me whether its any good atm

two of the songs were inspired by others around one wrote for somebody who asked for it and the other well i just got bored

zaammk · 12-07-2005, 20:27

I made my own song!

edit: based off the theme song, erm, the bananas or something, that was about bears?

Idle_hands · 12-07-2005, 20:35

Dont nick Death Cab For Cutie Lyrics
"I've got a hunger twisting my stomach into knots"

skater guy · 12-07-2005, 20:49

i didnt i asked sombody i know to help me out and they said that

anyway i gotta edit it, ll finish it off an then re read it and change it all a little

Dieslowuk · 12-07-2005, 20:55

I was gonna read them but then I realised it be probably a typical rock lyrics, depressing and suicidal, so I decided against it.

Hope its good to those who listen.

zaammk · 12-07-2005, 21:36

Not typical rock lyrics, emo lyrics. Thats pretty steryotypical of you, as most rock music isn't depressing, at least not what I listen to.

edit: that isnt depressing, also, i dunno why that band are litrally unheard of by any1 that hasnt read the sb e-mails, they r really good!

Seth · 12-07-2005, 22:42

Erm, not that great tbh - but maybe it's cause it's just lyrics? It's like trying to imagine what a complicated dish tastes like by reading a recipe card....

MaKo · 13-07-2005, 00:20

generic, uninteresting, nonsensical in parts.

And considering your avatar, not a little hypocritical.

skater guy · 13-07-2005, 07:23

Seeee this is exactly what i wanted people to do

everyone who has commented so far has just said they 're brilliant, but then again they are people i know very well....so they would, but i no i can always rely on tf to give me honest answer's

More comments would be nice though XD

Revan · 13-07-2005, 08:02

Atleast you tried, I will read them later. Best edit out any DCFC rips before then

skater guy · 13-07-2005, 08:08

Yes i did try but the people i already asked i dont really think gave me an honest opinion, so thats obviously why i posted them on here because i know people will just say what they really think about them.

Hehehe cant wait to read your reply though XD

Revan · 13-07-2005, 08:13

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Originally Posted by skater guy

Yes i did try but the people i already asked i dont really think gave me an honest opinion, so thats obviously why i posted them on here because i know people will just say what they really think about them.

Hehehe cant wait to read your reply though XD

read them now, I think they are really weak as song lyrics, too much like a story, I have not written any lyrics since I was around your age, I will try and dig some up, I will possibly find them weak like yours when I read them back, also ill post a mates lyrics if he lets me and show you what lyrics should be like.

12-07-2005, 20:35	#3 (permalink)
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Name & Title skater guy DING!!!!!!! Avatar Karma Pu-635.99	Re: Songs i wrote :D i didnt i asked sombody i know to help me out and they said that anyway i gotta edit it, ll finish it off an then re read it and change it all a little
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Name & Title Seth roflcopters Avatar Mood Karma Pu10,220.53	Re: Songs i wrote :D Erm, not that great tbh - but maybe it's cause it's just lyrics? It's like trying to imagine what a complicated dish tastes like by reading a recipe card....
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Name & Title skater guy DING!!!!!!! Avatar Karma Pu-635.99	Re: Songs i wrote :D Seeee this is exactly what i wanted people to do everyone who has commented so far has just said they 're brilliant, but then again they are people i know very well....so they would, but i no i can always rely on tf to give me honest answer's More comments would be nice though XD
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Name & Title skater guy DING!!!!!!! Avatar Karma Pu-635.99	Re: Songs i wrote :D Yes i did try but the people i already asked i dont really think gave me an honest opinion, so thats obviously why i posted them on here because i know people will just say what they really think about them. Hehehe cant wait to read your reply though XD
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